My poem is about the beach. My poem shows the way i really appreciate the beach and the how beautiful the beach can be if you look at it real closely.
I really think the visual really impacts the poem because you get an idea of what i or someone else is talking about. I also think it really impacts it because it gives a visual look about that sentence which gives you a different perspective of the beach and poem. Lastly, it really impacts poem because it feels like you right there and watching the waves and ocean.
My special effects affects the overall meaning by how i put natural sounds because it seems like you actually there sitting there at the beach watching the waves crash. My special effects affects the audience by them really getting hooked because you are looking and hearing about the story which is the poem and imagery. Lastly, my special effects affects the mood by giving you joy because of all the fun and beauty the poem is showing and telling.
When i was all finished with the poem i was satisfied with my poem because it shows and tells enough information to give a good perspective on my thoughts on the beach. I think i could make it better by adding and getting more b-roll. Also i could add a title for the beginning to introduce my poem. Lastly, i think i could of spoked with a little more emotion to express myself and the poem.
Hi, Ehu. ^-^ Your visual poem was really great, and I admire how you were able to make it rhyme (because I don't know how to T^T). Though one think you could improve, is lowering your volume for your music. And one other thing I liked was the end where at the bottom had the words that you said, it really matched.
ReplyDeleteAwesome shots, love your audio. Great effects and your music really matches.
ReplyDeleteGreat script and voice over audio !
I really liked the flow in your poem. Maybe next time try to add more emotion into your voice. Great job though!
ReplyDeleteOkay, never mind my first comment, I misheard Mr. Sanderl. Anyways, nice blog, Ehu! I like how your music isn't too loud. Though one thing you can do is lower your main audio, it's too loud. And another thing I like about your video was about you had footage at the beach.
ReplyDeleteGreat sequencing. I saw a few green flashes from you not letting your footage render all the way. Nice easy to read text layovers.
ReplyDelete- I like how you filmed in the water
ReplyDelete- Maybe you could've filmed more underwater shots
- Your voiceover was easy to hear.
Nice job Ehu! The B-Roll angles, especially the B-Roll of the sun, was amazing!
ReplyDeleteThe music could be adjusted.
The poem was read very clearly!
Hey Ehu. Great work on your visual poem. I really liked your B-Roll because it was stunning and it really matched your poem. One thing I suggest is lowering down your main audio as it was a little too long. I really liked how you put text effects as well.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your text layovers, they were simple and relevant. One improvement that I would suggest is reading a bit faster at some parts and having a bit more expression in your voice. You had a lot of B-Roll, and it majority of the shots were very applicable and really brought out the theme. Great job!
ReplyDeleteGood Job! I like how you got shots at a lot of different places. Some parts of your poem I couldn't really understand. The music added a nice mood to your poem.
ReplyDeleteClear shots.
ReplyDeleteMake shots more clear.
Gr8 music.
I liked the shots of the beach you used. Your voiceover could have been said with more emotion. The visuals you used matched your poem.
ReplyDeleteThe music helped make the beach sound fun.
ReplyDeleteThere could have been more feeling in the poem.
There were a lot of good visuals.
I liked the visuals you used they were shot well and they matched our poem. You could've used a bit more emotion in your voiceover. I liked the music you used, it matched your poem well.
ReplyDeleteNice B-roll shots. Maybe next time you could read your poem with more expression... Awesome poem though, I really liked it!
ReplyDeleteYour voice was clear and I could understand what you were saying.
ReplyDeleteWhen you said "Whoosh", you could of added more expression to that
Your music was at a good volume and I'm glad you had the time to get good B-Roll
1.) I really liked how you had video clips and pictures of under the water... it really made me fell like I was at the beach.
ReplyDelete2.) I think you could have lowered the volume of the music so we could hear your voice more.
3.) I really liked the last shot of you going under the wave, great job!
Nice poem, well written poem. I think you used the same B-roll twice, the one of the pan of the beach. Nice B-roll.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the shots you used, they matched. It didn't really seem that you had any feeling in saying your poem. Your b-roll was really easy to understand.
ReplyDeleteYour backround music was pretty good.
ReplyDeleteI think you could've improved your B-Roll to be more relative.
I liked your ending.
Great B-role.
ReplyDeleteSome B-role was not very clear.
Cool Music!!! Great Job Kaehukaiiha'amaina'e Sharlene Keala!
Awesome video. Also love your awesome shots.
ReplyDeleteIf i made that video i would of put more translations and also more video stabilizers.
Over all i love your video!
Really nice B-roll. one b-roll look like it was last minute Well written poem rhymed and made sense.
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